100 Words With a Twist

I recently wrote a piece for a contest, and then never got round to submitting it. The story had to be 100 words; no more, no less and it had to have a bit of a twist. Here’s my feeble attempt. What do you think?

The verdant expanse of lawn was quickly filling with people hoping for a glimpse of the great man. Nathuram strode purposely through the crowd, his features set in an expression of determination. The old man, supported by his daughter and a pupil, walked unsteadily toward the throng. Nathuram clasped his hands together in supplication and knelt at the old man’s feet. The daughter attempted to push him away, “Brother, Bapu is already late for prayers”. As he rose, a pistol appeared in his hand. A scream pierced the warm, summer air. From beneath his dhoti, Gandhi’s bullet found Nathuram’s heart.

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About Ol' Big Jim

Ol' Big Jim, has been a storekeeper, an embalmer, a hospital orderly, a medical biller, and through it all, a teller of tall tales. Many of his stories, like his first book, New Yesterdays, are set in his hometown of Piedmont, Alabama. For seven years, he lived in the oldest continuously inhabited city in the world, Amman, Jordan where he spends his time trying to visit each one of the thousands of Ammani coffee shops and scribbling in his ever-present notebook. These days, you can find him back stateside, still filling notebooks.

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6 Responses to 100 Words With a Twist

historywithatwist says:

29/12/2014 at 15:49

I think you should have entered the competition. Nice twist

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- Ol' Big Jim says:
  
  30/12/2014 at 02:24
  
  I’m sorry I didn’t. Honestly, it was some time in the future and I wrote the story and put it on my desktop “so I wouldn’t forget” to keep an eye on the calendar. You know the rest of the story. Thanks for coming by, David, it’s always good to hear from you!
  
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Kathy Woods says:

30/12/2014 at 01:20

Oooh, you’ll be sent to Naraka for that but I love it.

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- Ol' Big Jim says:
  
  30/12/2014 at 02:22
  
  You’re probably right, but I’m thinking a change of scenery might be a good idea. After all, Naraka isn’t permanent is it? Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving a few words, Kathy, and don’t be a stranger!
  
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jaysquires says:

29/08/2017 at 00:06

Jim, I’ve been having fun tinkering through your website. First of all, I had no idea you live in Jordan. What a life you lead. Then I went right away to the 100 word story. You amaze me, my friend. Imagine: Gandhi as a murderer! Good stuff. Finally, your bio and my only question: were you an embalmer (Oh, I can’t go back without losing this!) after your stint in the hospital … or during. And were you paid a flat rate per body? Or hourly. Hmmmmmm? Bless you my good friend.

Jay

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- Ol' Big Jim says:
  
  31/08/2017 at 02:05
  
  I worked as an embalmer on several occasions both before and after hospitals. As I recall, my pay rate was generally hourly. Thanks so much for stopping by, Jay! Hope to see you more!
  
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